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Steel Blue Eyes
Topic Started: Jul 11 2009, 10:43 PM (619 Views)
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I once gave a Kangaroo a heart-attack just by staring at it

Written in like 10 minutes. I hated it as I wrote it...but I think it's grown on me

For those who don't know, this is Steel Blue, it's my favourite colour, and very pretty for a girl's eyes
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Steel_blue

Things I cannot hide,
Looks and stares pass me by,
Want to lay and hide,
My own mind, I can't find

Clouds appear, don't disappear
We like the rain
So sit down,and refrain
from leaving me

A look from your eyes;
mystifies
the things I never realised:
Your steel blue eyes.

You gotta listen to my words
When I have to be heard
I gotta reach the sky
Away from steel blue eyes

The smell from your perfume,
flowers in bloom
How can I lie,
to Steel blue eyes?

A look from your eyes;
mystifies
the things I never realised:
Your steel blue eyes.


Edit: It hath been recorded! Click here for the YouTube and listen to it.
Edited by Byakko, Jul 13 2009, 03:17 PM.
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Hm I really like it. It's cute lyrics. What was your motivation behind it ?
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I once gave a Kangaroo a heart-attack just by staring at it

A girl I like, but can't have. Lol, stereotypical much?
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Ah, the ever-present motivation in every creative area :P But I like it, great wording and written well.

I don't want to get this wrong, but it is a poem yes, and not a song?
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I once gave a Kangaroo a heart-attack just by staring at it

Nope, it's a song, there's a tune to it too. I plan on recording it, if I can.
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When i read this i kept thinking about a boxing match between Ricky Hatton and an irish man called Eamonn McGee. In it the commentators said McGee was giving Hatton this steely eyed look, he would not yield and was willing to give it his all. :)

Your written work is about the colour of a girls eyes and how she makes you feel but i kept thinking about someone who was quite a hard person. Im guessing though she is not like that and is someone you adore.

Theres a tune to these lyrics, will you post that as well?
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I once gave a Kangaroo a heart-attack just by staring at it

Yeah, I plan on recording it and uploading it to YouTube :)
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I hope you do upload it 'cause I'm looking forward to hearing it with the tune.
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I once gave a Kangaroo a heart-attack just by staring at it

Argh! It'd be up already if I wasn't having problems with my recording studio =(

And the Boss BR Forums aren't very quick to respond
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That was quite nice to read, Mike.

I can imagine an acoustic song to those lyrics in my head. And like I told you over msn, eyes can carry such a strong expression... it's fascinating to me.

You did a good job with these lyrics. Can we expect more love related topics in your writings? :p ;)

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I once gave a Kangaroo a heart-attack just by staring at it

Perhaps, it's more than likely. My love life is pretty terrible.

The song is actually acoustic, though I'm singing I can't help but think a higher pitched voice, probably Alto style (medium in the high - low scale, lol) would be better than my Baritone

MBR Forums still haven't solved my problem
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OoOo I hope I can hear the recording. Did you tell the girl that this song is about her or does she not even know about it?
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I once gave a Kangaroo a heart-attack just by staring at it

She's seen the song, but she doesn't know it's about her.

Truth be told, I don't want her to know. We have such a good relationship as it is, and there's no way that we could be together anyways. So I think it's better she doesn't know, so things can keep going the way they are. The irony of the song is: She doesn't even have Steel Blue eyes, though her eyes are beautiful, regardless of what colour they may or may not be. I chose steel blue because I didn't think my other title was any good, and the song didn't flow well.
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Aww how come there is no way you guys can be together? It seems like one of those love triangles or something. Well I like the title. It's a very catchy one. Just can't wait until you upload the song.
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I once gave a Kangaroo a heart-attack just by staring at it

Well, I don't want to ruin the friendship by telling her I like her. And she lives so far away it'd be pointless.
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